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Rasmus Rosenkrantz's avatar

Incredible rhythm and musicality to this one. Flows in such a blissful way, like you know the the words that follow each line, without needing to read any further!

Benno's avatar

Rasmus, that’s beautiful praise! Very grateful 🙏

Ricardo Guzman Jr's avatar

Goodness, you must have been possessed by an the ancestral spirit of Gaia or something. This was so beautiful. I love it all!

Benno's avatar

Haha XD Not sure about Gaia, but definitely some mead, so maybe some kindred spirit? Thanks a lot Ricardo =)

Madeline Legere's avatar

The ~flow~ is beautiful

Benno's avatar

Thanks Madeline! 🙏

Martin Garcia's avatar

Benno! I loved, "No decrease / in his solemn gait," The sun as walking down over the horizon is not something I have heard. It's usually the movement of the heavens or some such. This was awesome! Thank you for sharing!

Benno's avatar

Thanks Martin! I'm glad that line resonated so in giving some character to the sun! Happy solstice!

Phoenix's avatar

Nice.

Benno's avatar

Thanks!

Rea de Miranda's avatar

Beautiful prose to follow the path of the sun. You are amazing, Benno!

Benno's avatar

Aww, thanks! Thank you Rea for the warmth and kindness =)!

Blace Alcock's avatar

Lovely as always Benno. That drop in the second last line and the rising feeling I put from the last line was breathtaking

Benno's avatar

Much appreciated Blace! I was really happy to read your comment because I was indeed hoping to convery that!

Brother Rob's avatar

Lovely cadence to match the grace of a falling Sun, really liked this one Benno

Benno's avatar

Thanks Rob, glad that was able to shine through! Happy solstice!

Brother Rob's avatar

Happy solstice!!

Sam Sweitzer's avatar

Love the way the text falls like the sun beneath the horizon!

Benno's avatar

Thank you! It was something I hoped should show!