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Josh Datko's avatar

Benno! Great poem, but your shooting is shit :) you gotta tighten up that pattern, get a closer grouping, and eliminate those strays.

:) I used to do some competitive shooting.

Benno's avatar

😅 In my defense it was a bunch of us using that target, and they where practicing some speed drills with low accuracy, so def not something I would use to showcase my skill, though I can claim the bullseye there at least haha

Martin Garcia's avatar

Benno! I've never shot a gun before, I can only imagine the feel.

I liked, "but I have also learned / female strategies" and later on, "I've never felt so ignorant, / like a man oblivious / of woman seductions." because it tied in the feminine to a symbol so often attributed to the masculine. The dualistic nature of the gun is fascinating.

Then, I really liked, the questions at the end. Although a politician has the power to do genocide the poem needs to be created first.

Hope all is good!

Benno's avatar

Yo Martin! Thank you, yes, this duality was one of the constant plays in the poems, hope you’re having a great week start!